I still remember every detail of that night. How we got in that fight. From the very first time we spoke, until I knew there was no more hope. Well this is the story about my first and last love!
She was my everything. She was always there to wipe away my tears and support me to fight away my fears. But now I sit alone and ask myself, why she had to leave? Didn’t she know I couldn’t live without her? Why didn’t she tell me what she was going through? I guess she did really hide it well! That night she called me. I remember every word she said. It keeps going over and over in my head.
I kept yelling at her to tell me what was going on. I told her not to do anything she knew was stupid and wrong. She told me one more time that she loved me but SHE HAD TO GO. Then there was silence on the other end of the phone. I sat there and cried until I heard the dial tone. Then I got up and ran to her house.
When I got there I saw my love just lying there, but it wasn’t her anymore. I still want to know what she did that for? It has been one year since that day, since she thought she had to go away. And here I sit on her grave, with my head down in the ground crying as my hands are going over her name.
I still love her more than ever and I can’t take this anymore. I take the pills out of my pocket and I take them one by one, until the whole thing is gone. I sit here and wait; I know it won’t be long. I sit with a smile on my face knowing all this pain will soon go away, and I will be with her to stay.
I look at her picture once more and then all of a sudden there she is. I cry happy tears knowing we will now be together forever. And no one can take her away! NOT EVER!
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39 comments:
It was really tragic but has been written beautifully!
great bhaai..I am really chocked....I am touched...Thanks for making me emotional
@ Jaspreet
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@ Abhilash
Thank you for your appreciation dude. Those words really meant a lot for me. :)
this prose is heartbreaking, yet so lovingly
and lovely written.
Oh.. Tragedy.. It was beautifully written with a apt picture... Great..
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Well written. May I suggest to you that it could have been written more elaborately, perhaps with a description of what had happened. It might have involved the reader more. Just a small suggestion:)
But a good job on the whole. Wish you the best of luck!
Tragic..yet we know it is love..even though the why-s and how-s are a mystery, we know what it is..i liked the easy flow of words, simple yet powerful..really great..had the goosebumps
Aww! It is similar to something I read a while ago. You do put it across well!
All the best!
Cheers
Hiyaa
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Fiction???
Nicely written. :)
Cheers
first love is always the most special feeling and when it becomes first+last love its something like a life long relationship either with him/her or without them..
nice post loved the way you put down the feelings of someone who is madly in love !! :)
p.s all the best for contest :)
kindly check mine post if get time ;) :P
hurt... thats what i felt... hurt..
really touched! well written!! really good!
:( tragic... but i like the way it's written right from the heart type..
Very touching indeed!
Gkam
is this a suicide promotion blog?
Thats sad.. I hope u are ok now..
not very happy but nicely said!
Nice one, could have been tighter in editing, but nice
thats tragic ... poignant story ...
well written...
The twist turn of the end passage is really wonderful..besutiful...tiny post yet so apt combo of emotions..shades of feelings and simple words that echo so much!
Well done..!
Liked it!! Will aspect you to write more such aspect of short stories..kidnly shre the link with me too one you publish them :))
~Keep the Spark ALive..
:) Good one..
Yeah now no one can keep them apart, Well written
very very emotional... love it that without wasting too many words, you brought the feeling right in the forefront... :)
Shwetal Rai
http://raispace.blogspot.com
Wow!!
wonderfully written..
I could feel the pain..nice one :)
Well written but does not deserve any appreciation if it reflects the views of the author. Does it ?
nicely said :)
soulful n honest!
Really sad...Well written though.I'm sorry to hear about this
omg!
its more tragic than tere naam movie !!
Y did she die ?!
short n precise, but cause of death not revealed...
niiiiiceeeeeeee...*(deep sighs)* :)
grt.....man nice way of summurizin it olll.....love it
Nicely written, but tragedy is indigestible...
You are an excellent writer man. Short yet elegant. The story is always gripping.
But I really wonder why its always tragic?
Touched me..
thats good prose but suicide? really?
nicely written.
The great way to enjoy the emotions inside you is in the way u did.. by this scribbling !! Very well Expressed! :)
awesomely written! completely choking!
Thanks a lot Binitha! :)
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